“Oh mighty father of mine. I know I have disappointed you
before, but I have lost one of my most prized possessions. Without my only eye,
how will I live? How will I tend to my sheep? How will I hunt? I am at a loss.
Please Poseidon, avenge my loss!”
As Poseidon sat in his underwater palace, he heard his
forgotten son’s cry for help. He immediately knew what needed to be done to repay
Odysseus, and it would not end well for the over confident King of Ithaca. He
quickly sent the message through the sea to the one thing that could avenge his
son: beautiful sirens…
Odysseus grinned as his ship sailed through the treacherous
water. The sea was getting rough but he thought of how lucky he was to have
escaped the grasps of that evil Cyclops Polyphemus. As he sat in his cabin
eating the freshly cooked goat, he felt an uneasy feeling come over him. He
quickly got dressed and ran onto the deck of his ship.
“Elpenor, why are we heading west? Our sails should be
heading to my kingdom Ithaca. I cannot wait to tell my wife of my strength and
whit to defeat the mighty Cyclops.”
“King Odysseus, the tide strengthens every second, I am
afraid there is nothing we can do to change course. The man on the crow’s nest
spotted a beautiful island this way though. We can feast and wait for the storm
to end. Then we will head to Ithaca.” Odysseus, with irritation, accepted the
option.
As Odysseus and his men arrived on the island, they began to
cook and drink sweet red wine from the hide skin pouches. The night progressed
full of celebration for their escape from Polyphemus. As the sun disappeared
over the horizon, a strange noise could be heard from the rustling sea. It was
a smooth and calming sound, like a mother singing lullabies to her brand new infant.
The men stopped what they were doing and were mesmerized by the music. The men
slowly walking towards the ocean in a trance, when all of a sudden a beautiful
siren jumped out of the water. The men entered the water to meet these beautiful
creatures. As soon as the men reached the water, the music stopped. There was a
quick splash of the water and the Odysseus’ men were pulled under the water and
drowned one at a time. The sirens attacked the men, destroying all of the ships
with their powerful tails.
Sirens |
Odysseus recognized this trickery and broke free from the trance. In a panic, he tried to devise a plan to save not only himself, but the rest of his men fighting off the sirens. He studied the hectic shore and noticed that the sirens were avoiding the area next to a beautiful purple jacaranda tree.
He yelled at the only man remaining, Elpenor, “That purple
tree is our only hope! They cannot go near this tree for it is poisonous”.
The sirens continued their mesmerizing songs, while Odysseus
fought the overwhelming urge to go into the sea. He ran in the tide towards the
tree, slowing down as the music intensity increased. Elpenor was following when
all of a sudden one of the sirens grabbed his ankle. She started pulling him
into the water with her powerful body. All was lost. Elpenor was about to give
up when all of a sudden the siren let go. The entire group of sirens screeched
and dove down into the depths of the ocean. Elpenor was in shock as he looked
up at the strong Odysseus hold a limb of the jacaranda tree.
Both men, exhausted, sat on the sand of the beautiful beach
and thought of what just happened. They had escaped yet again, but were now
stranded on the island with no ships and no men. The long journey home had just
gotten a little longer…
Author’s Note: My story was inspired by Homer’s Odyssey. I
kept the original story similar in that Odysseus and his men escaped the
cyclops and faced a long journey home. I included similar characters such as Elpenor,
Polyphemus, Odysseus, and the sirens. I wanted to touch on the fact that
Odysseus is very arrogant and thinks that he cannot be defeated. I almost
included a part where Poseidon actually defeats Odysseus, but I wanted to stick
to the original story in that Odysseus is one of the strongest men. Furthermore,
I wanted to include a certain item that would allow for Odysseus to defeat the
enemy, so I included the purple jacaranda tree.
Homer’s Odyssey. Translated by Tony Kline. 2004.
Very cool! I might be a little biased, because I always liked myths about the sirens, but the details about the sirens utterly destroying the ship and murdering the sailors really grabbed me. I also like how you began the story with the cyclops asking Poseidon for help, so there was a reason for the slaughter later. The first sentence grabbed my attention too. But the final thing to seal the end of the story up nicely was, for me, Odysseus' use of the purple jacaranda tree. It's been a little while since I've read the Odyssey, but I don't remember this part--did you come up with it? If so, I like it a lot.
ReplyDeleteI think it would be interesting to hear Poseidon's thoughts on the events of the story at the end. Would he respect Odysseus, or just be furious again and try something else? Also, is there any particular reason you chose Elpenor? Does he have a special quality, like Odysseus' wisdom?
Again, cool story! It's an adventure for sure.
I really enjoyed reading your story, Trevor! Your excellent descriptions of the ocean, the Siren's mesmerizing song, and the combat to free themselves of their grasp were gripping. My favorite part was when Polyphemus cried out to Poseidon and he chose to help his forgotten son. What was the backstory on why Polyphemus was forgotten? I found myself wondering about that and feeling bad that he had been left behind by his father. What would have happened if they had not found the purple jacaranda tree? I thought that was an interesting touch and really completed the battle scene. This was a really well-written story!
ReplyDeleteTrevor,
ReplyDeleteYou are a really good writer and have an ability to keep me interested in a story which is really quite amazing. You extended the reader excellent descriptions and the quotes were relevant. It’s interesting that you personified these people to the fullest extent – you have a really clean writing technique that is impressive.
I noticed you changed a lot about the story – keep putting your own twists to stories!
Erin