“Ah, I can tell that you belong
to the sea, my friend. When do you set sail next?”
“Tomorrow. I just got back from
my first trip but I need the money. My wife just gave birth to my beautiful daughter.”
“Well, a working man is the best
kind of man. To get your mind off of leaving your daughter, I’ll tell you a
story. Have you ever heard of Aarav Delfino and his voyages across the Indian Ocean?”
The old man replied with a certain level of eagerness in his voice.
“No, sir, I have not. Would you
care to enlighten me? I could really use something to get my mind off of
setting sail tomorrow.”
The old man cleared his throat
and told the story of the great Aarav Delfino…
When Aarav was about your age, he
began an epic journey to Jakarta to trade cloths and pieces of art from his hometown.
Now Aarav was quite the barterer and had already taken many of these trips
before. He always came back home with a pocketful of sequins and this trip
should be no different. However, he couldn’t have been any more wrong.
He set sail on his beautiful ship
with a dozen hands that would reap only a small fraction of his spoils. The crew
was sailing the sea just off the coast of Sri Lanka when a horrible storm
rolled in. The clouds were as dark as a moonless night, only to be lit up by
the sharp lightning strikes up above. As the wind swirled, the ship began to
sink. Aarav, being the most agile of the crew, jumped off the ship first just
in time before the sea engulfed the ship and all of his crew.
Aarav swam for what seemed like
forever when he finally reached the shore of a lush island that he had not seen
before. He quickly dried off his clothes and put down his large sword. From
pure exhaustion he collapsed into an area that was full of fallen palm fronds. He closed his eyes
and slept through the night.
As the morning sun rolled over
the horizon, Aarav opened his eyes. His vision slowly cleared when in
front of him he saw a gigantic egg. From tales of other sailors, he knew exactly
what he had come across. It belonged to the 20-foot-long snake called a moccra. These moccras
were extremely aggressive and protective when anyone or thing got near their
young. Aarav needed to come up with a plan immediately or he would have to fight
off this magnificent serpent. If he fought, he would not win.
He was always quick on his feet,
so he developed a plan immediately. What he would do was carefully break into
the gigantic egg and hide where the young serpent was residing. He would put the
egg shell back together and wait for the mother moccra to return.
Portrayal of the moccra |
Aarav was waiting in this warm,
damp egg when he heard a slow hiss getting closer and closer. He peeked through
the cracked egg and saw the giant black and yellow moccra slithering to its young. The
moccra curled up next to the egg for it did not know Aarav was hiding there. As
the hissing slowed and the moccra fell asleep, Aarav began to act. Jumping out
of the egg, he swung his sword into the neck of the mother. A large squeal
followed the attack and then complete silence. Aarav had defeated this beast
with ease.
The first thing he did was cut
off the fangs of this snake for he knew they would easily sell for a thousand
sequins each. He then went into survival mode and cleaned the serpent of her meat. He developed a meal plan to survive for however long it took until he found
help. What he did not know was that no one was looking for him. He was all by
himself.
To be continued...
Author’s Note: I read the Seven
Voyages of Sinbad and developed my story on this topic. I wanted to incorporate
the storytelling aspect of the original story. Therefore, I made the old man be
the storyteller. I think this places a crucial part in allowing the reader to
connect with the narrator. In addition, it allows the reader to decide for themselves
whether the stories are real, exaggerated, or simply made up.One of the things
that I enjoyed when reading these tales were Sinbad’s intelligence and his
business-first mind. Therefore, I let Aarav possess both of these traits in order
to be successful in his long journey home after his ship was wrecked. In
addition, I wanted to include an epic journey where Aarav would face a giant
creature. In the original Sinbad, he ran into a giant bird called a roc. This
animal shows up multiple times throughout the original story. I did not want to
use the same animal as the original so I developed a new animal called a moccra
(snake). I plan to include more voyages of his in upcoming stories. After defeating
the animals and other obstacles, Sinbad usually makes it back home with ease.
In my story, I wanted to make it to where he does not get home as quickly. Therefore,
he will have to overcome a multitude of obstacles in order to make it back home
safely.
I enjoyed how you started off the story. You did a really great job at describing the scenery and events. I could imagine exactly what was happening. A giant aggressive snake; the idea of a moccra is slightly terrifying! It was interesting to see that he cut off the fangs to sell and saved the body to eat. Survival at its finest.
ReplyDeleteI love how to took the story of Sinbad and came up with something entirely original. I really enjoyed your story and thought you did a great job. The way you set up the story with the old man was really nice. I also enjoyed how descriptive you were when setting up the story of Aarav. I would love to see what stories you come up with next.
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